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1. Make a copy of this document and title it “(your name) Unit One FRQ rewrite.” Put your name and period number in the space provided above on this document. We will analyze the FRQ together. You must fill out this copy along with us now.



2. Type your essay verbatim in the space provided, analyze your essay in the space provided, rewrite it, analyze it in the space provided, print it and bring it to class on Friday Nov. 1st [B Day] OR Tuesday Nov. 5th [A Day].

3. Analyze how the ideas and experiences of the Revolutionary Era influenced the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation. (2009B)

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How does this essay’s THESIS respond to the prompt with a logical argument?
The thesis barely responds to the prompt; it does so generally, leaving much room for any examples that come to mind during the rest of the essay. No evidence is mentioned, the thesis is just a restatement of the prompt here unfortunately.


How does this essay respond to the prompt, use evidence, and support the thesis?

How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Land Acquisition:

  • Proclamation line of 1763



Evidence:

Demonstrated the government of Britain’s first intervention between the Native American’s and the colonists.



How does it support the Thesis?

border struggles in the states could lead to a civil war, land interference was declared by Britain to stop settlers west of the appalachian mountains. Later revised by the articles to grant ALL authority in means of settlement to the



How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Politics:

  • Articles of confederation granting the nation authority to intervene against natives/colonists (French and Indian war)


Evidence:

Shows the articles granting the nation more power

How does it support the Thesis?

Because of the french and indian war, the articles granted the authority of the state to intervene between conflicts happening with natives/french people



How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Economics:

  • Navigation acts



Evidence:

Economy was struggling, the British Navigation acts further tarnished the American economy

How does it support the Thesis?
Shows that the navigation acts, which occured in the revolutionary era, forced a revision of this sector of government in the articles of confederation.




Type, verbatim, your FRQ that you wrote in class on the day of the test, below.

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The experiences of the revolutionary era massively impacted the principles embodied in the articles of confederation through example of events including affiliations of economy and politics.

To begin, the Articles of Confederation’s main purpose was to check the power that the national government had accumulated in all aspects. In economy, the government previously had the ability to tax the nation as a whole granting it complete rule over the states in terms of tax authority. This power was eliminated with the articles allowing states to control taxes for themselves. The economy, around the time of the articles, was set in shambles because of the Navigation Acts declaring all maritime trade to be hosted solely with english ships. This destroyed the economies of the states especially bordered with the ocean possibly leading to the recognition of the delegates constructing the articles that a national economy would suffer from that event if the economies of each state were combined. By isolating American colonies economy, national economy is left more secure.



The phenomena occurring with the politics of pre-articles America also influenced ideals presented in the Articles. Indians strife with the surrounding white colonists and their desire to expand allowed for constant battle between Indians and Colonists. In the articles, it is stated that the National government would have the ability to intervene wihin borders in order to define them and resolve native conflict. The alter event of the proclamation line declared by the British further represents the expensive tackle of colonists need for fuel to expand over the Native Americans.
The overall purpose of the articles graned each state sovereignty, in regards to the ability of the state to tax itself and in politics, whre the state is only loosely governed by the central authority. The articles were a first attempt of the Americans to pull away from the crown as an independent nation; with this said, theworking monarchy of the British may have been viewed as an area of familiarity and of dependence to the delegates who created the articles By creating a loose central authority, the conoloists assured that they would be completely individual of British customs further asserting themselves as independent. The naval supremacy of the British is just as contrasting to the non-existing American navy also referencing Britain and America as it’s polar opposite trying to pull away completely from the English kingdom by being completely different to it.
With the economy and politics of America being loosely thrown together in a time of war, the Articles were an attempt to diversify this failing political structure by limiting central authority, allowing tates to tax themselves intervening with Native American and colonists’ border struggles and creating a common rule for colonists that would bring that as a completely opposite, disloyal party in relation to Britain.

Barely a thesis. Really just awful, loosely stated, no specific examples listed, all around genuinely terrible thesis.
Bad beginning, bad explanation, the paragraph doesn’t even properly respond to the prompt. No cause/effect identified, Navigation acts barely talked about
Economy was destroyed, what happened because of this?
Topic sentence is just the the thesis statement, identifies a new power of the government, but no cause for this change. Does not connect the authority grant to an example.


Another restatement of the thesis

Talks about colonists wanting to do the exact opposite of Britain, doesn’t make sense, painful to read

Conclusion ties together everything in the essay, regardless of it’s generalities, nicely. Probably the only good thing about this essay.

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How does this essay’s THESIS respond to the prompt with a logical argument?

3. Analyze how the ideas and experiences of the Revolutionary Era influenced the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation.


Many different ideas and experiences of the Revolutionary Era influenced the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation as illustrated by: the proclamation line of 1763 in relationship to land acquisition, the Declaration of Independence, the French and Indian war, and the Albany plan of Union in accordance with land politics, and with the Navigation acts and the debt accumulated by the French and Indian war as seen in the American Economy.
It responds directly, with a clear stance on how 5 different pieces of evidence influenced the Articles of Confederation and in what areas.


How does this essay respond to the prompt, use evidence, and support the thesis?

How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Land Acquisition:

Proclamation line of 1763



Evidence:

The Proclamation line of 1763 was a declaration by the British, because of Native American conflicts and losses in the colonies, that no colonists could settle west of the Appalachian Mountains in America.

How does it support the Thesis?

Because in the very first article of confederation it is stated that each state agrees to become part of the union that is the United States of America, America would want as much land as possible to form an even stronger union. With that in mind, the Proclamation line of 1763 was a hinderance to the expansion of America; it was a limitation. A union with a limitation is weaker than one without one. The statement of the British, the proclamation line designated on the Appalachian mountains, was an experience for the Americans that hindered their expansion, with the Articles of Confederation stating that each state is a union, the united agreement of each state towards one another makes an additional Proclamation Line impossible because it would harm the nation.



How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Land Politics:

Declaration of Independence

Albany Plan of Union, French and Indian War



Evidence:

The declaration of independence was a formal withdrawal from Great Britain which created America.


America learned how to effectively use unions along with the power of a single, united union.

How does it support the Thesis?

The ninth article of Confederation identifies the powers of Congress which include the right to declare war and make peace, send foreign ambassadors , and oversee naval trials for crimes committed at sea. These rights are all reserved for independent nations, with the Declaration of Independence came the union of the States as an entire nation, this nation then withdrew and became completely individual of Great Britain. The reason the declaration of independence can be considered as an experience influencing the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation is because the rights listed belong only to entire independent nations. With the United States as just an underling of Britain, these rights could never have been declared in the Articles making the Declaration of Independence one of the direct causes to the establishment of the ninth article of confederation.
At the beginning of the French and Indian war, several states met in an Albany congress to discuss the best course of action for the coming war. A decision was made, a general union, a bond between colonies would fuel the battle of the colonists against the Native Americans and the French. The battle was well fought and victory was claimed by the colonies. The Albany Plan and the victory achieved by the colonies in the french and indian war was an important lesson for the nation. This is obvious because of the Articles of Confederation and their demand for each state to conform to a general union in the instance of any type of warfare. Each state swears to assure to work towards the general well being of each individual state within the Nation. The principle applied in the establishment of the United states as a union was obviously learned as a result of the Albany Plan of Union and it’s guarantee to victory in the French and Indian War.



How does this essay ASSESS the CHANGE between the North American Colonies and Britain during the Revolutionary Era?

Economics:
Navigation Acts
French and Indian war



Evidence:
The Navigation acts were launched by Britain in:

1660— closed colonies to all trade except that carried on English ships and limited tobacco trade with England only

1663—all goods sent from Europe to the colonies must pass through England first

1673—imposed custom duties (import fees) on coastal trade to stop smuggling


Debt accumulated from Britain during the French and Indian war because of war debts was painful and caused an economic pain.


How does it support the Thesis?
As a major, limiting economic event that severely tarnished the economy of coastal colonies in America, this was one of the greatest lessons learned by the colonies and the lesson was certainly reflected in the articles of confederation. Also, war is expensive, the French and Indian war was no different. This build up of debt from the colonies towards America caused a massive economic grumble. The colonies knew that if they were to enter war again, something would have to be done to eliminate debt costs, or to at least limit it. Combined with the stress felt by the Navigation acts and the debt accumulated from the French and Indian war, action was finally taken. The articles of confederation, 7-8 specifically, called for the establishment of a common treasury. The common treasury would directly supply the nation, with fuel from each individual state, to protect and defend the United States of America in it’s entirety. This action was obviously taken as a direct result of the ideas and solutions created because of the Navigation acts and the French and Indian war respectively.



Rewrite your new and improved FRQ in the box below.

Many different ideas and experiences of the Revolutionary Era influenced the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation as illustrated by: the proclamation line of 1763 in relationship to land acquisition, the Declaration of Independence, the French and Indian war, and the Albany plan of Union in accordance with land politics, and with the Navigation acts and the debt accumulated by the French and Indian war as seen in the American Economy.
Land Acquisition was definitely affected by the Proclamation line of 1763 and it was addressed clearly, as a result of this effect, in the later established Articles of Confederation. The Proclamation line of 1763 was a declaration by the British, because of Native American conflicts and losses in the colonies, that no colonists could settle west of the Appalachian Mountains in America. Because in the very first article of confederation it is stated that each state agrees to become part of the union that is the United States of America, America would want as much land as possible to form an even stronger union. With that in mind, the Proclamation line of 1763 was a hinderance to the expansion of America; it was a limitation. A union with a limitation is weaker than one without one. The statement of the British, the proclamation line designated on the Appalachian mountains, was an experience for the Americans that hindered their expansion, with the Articles of Confederation stating that each state is a union, the united agreement of each state towards one another makes an additional Proclamation Line impossible because it would harm the nation therefore confirming that at least one segment of the Articles of Confederation was directly affected by the dictation that no colonists could settle west of the appalachian mountains.
Land politics were greatly affected by the ideas felt by the declaration of independence and the Albany plan of Union alongside of it’s resulting success felt in the French and Indian War; this is directly reflected in the Articles of Confederation. The declaration of independence was a formal withdrawal from Great Britain which created America and the Albany plan of Union taught America how to effectively use unions with the power of a single, united colonial body. The ninth article of Confederation identifies the powers of Congress which include the right to declare war and make peace, send foreign ambassadors , and oversee naval trials for crimes committed at sea. These rights are all reserved for independent nations, with the Declaration of Independence came the union of the States as an entire nation, this nation then withdrew and became completely individual of Great Britain. The reason the declaration of independence can be considered as an experience influencing the principles embodied in the Articles of Confederation is because the rights listed belong only to entire independent nations. With the United States as just an underling of Britain, these rights could never have been declared in the Articles making the Declaration of Independence one of the direct causes to the establishment of the ninth article of confederation. Additionally, at the beginning of the French and Indian war, several states met in an Albany congress to discuss the best course of action for the coming war. A decision was made, a general union, a bond between colonies would fuel the battle of the colonists against the Native Americans and the French. The battle was well fought and victory was claimed by the colonies. The Albany Plan and the victory achieved by the colonies in the french and indian war was an important lesson for the nation. This is obvious because of the Articles of Confederation and their demand for each state to conform to a general union in the instance of any type of warfare. Each state swears to assure to work towards the general well being of each individual state within the Nation. The principle applied in the establishment of the United states as a union was obviously learned as a result of the Albany Plan of Union and it’s guarantee to victory in the French and Indian War. With the most basic idea of the Articles of Confederation being that the colonies should unite as one common body, and the Declaration of Independence seceding America from great Britain and the Articles later dictation the America would have it’s own individual, global rights as a nation, these three pieces of evidence were obviously defining factors of the Articles of Confederation.
The Navigation Acts and the debt accumulated from the French and Indian war to Britain felt by the Colonies were both defining factors in the establishment of a common treasury in the articles of confederation. The Navigation acts were launched by Britain in, 1660 where Britain closed colonies to all trade except that carried on English ships and limited tobacco trade with England only in 1663 declaring that all goods sent from Europe to the colonies must pass through England first, and in 1763 where Britain imposed custom duties (import fees) on coastal trade to stop smuggling in the colonies. As a major, limiting economic event that severely tarnished the economy of coastal colonies in America, this was one of the greatest lessons learned by the colonies and the lesson was certainly reflected in the articles of confederation. Also, the French and Indian war put a massive strain on the economy of America because of its’ debt to Britain. This build up of debt from the colonies towards Britain caused a massive economic grumble. The colonies knew that if they were to enter war again, something would have to be done to eliminate debt costs, or to at least them. Combined with the stress felt by the Navigation acts and the debt accumulated from the French and Indian war, action was finally taken. The articles of confederation, articles 7-8 specifically, called for the establishment of a common treasury. The common treasury would directly supply the nation, with fuel from each individual state, to protect and defend the United States of America in it’s entirety. This action was obviously taken as a direct result of the ideas and solutions created because of the Navigation acts and the French and Indian war, respectively.
The Articles of Confederation held an entire nation together through a war period lasting over 8 years. The era leading to the establishment of the Articles, the Revolutionary Era, influenced the ideas portrayed by the Articles in accordance with running a nation massively. The proclamation line affected land acquisition, the Declaration of Independence and the Albany plan of union impacted the articles in the area of land politics, and the economic stress established by the Navigation Act’s and the debt to Britain from the French and Indian war led to the creation of a national treasury. Blatantly, all of these experiences led to the betterment of the United States of America with the Articles of Confederation.






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