(what you’ll include/talk about to show why your person is a hero)
“Timothy Treadwell is considered a modern day hero for his work as an environmentalist and his hands-on effort to protect the Alaskan brown bear.” This thesis statement clearly (1) expresses what the essay is about [Timothy Treadwell], gives a topic that can be (2) discussed and argued [that he is a modern day hero], and (3) indicates the structure of the essay [that he’s a hero because of his environmentalist work and his work of protecting brown bears].
Do I answer the question? Re-reading the question prompt after constructing a working thesis can help you fix an argument that has missed the focus of the question.
Is my thesis statement specific enough? Thesis statements that are too vague often do not have a strong argument. If your thesis contains words like “good” or “successful,” see if you could be more specific.
Does my thesis pass the “So what?” test? If a reader’s first response after reading your thesis statement is, “So what?”, then you need to clarify or connect to a larger issue.
Does my thesis pass the “How?” and “Why?” tests? IF a reader’s first response after reading your thesis statement is, “How?” or “Why?”, your thesis may be too open-ended and lack guidance for the reader. See what you can add to give the reader a better take on what your position is in the paper.