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Instructions: Copy and paste the following text into a document or create a document that contains the same information.

Using your essay in response to the unit's writing prompt, complete the following steps to improve your essay.



Introduction

  1. Insert your introductory paragraph with your central claim. Include any revisions your instructor asked you to make.

Brutus from Shakespeare’s Julius Caesar is the subject of controversy in regards to patriotism and betrayal Brutus was a patriot because although Brutus’s actions may have suggested otherwise, he did everything in protection of the Roman people and in support of his country. All his actions were done out of pure love for his country. Brutus is a patriot because he supported his country, although, some may disagree because Brutus betrayed his close friend and the people (accidently) by killing Julius Caesar.

Idea Development

  1. Write the body and conclusion of your argument in the space below.

“Et tu, Brute! Then fall, Caesar.” In Act 3, scene 1, Brutus acts against Julius in the betrayal of assassinating him. This action resulted in the accidental betrayal of the people whom wished for Julius Caesar to be crowned king. However, this does not take away from the fact that Brutus was a patriot for his people. “I would not, Cassius. Yet I love him well. But wherefore do you hold me here so long? What is it that you would impart to me? If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other,” (Act 1, scene 2) It is clear from Cassius’s intentions to turn Brutus against Julius that he only killed Julius Caesar out of support and faith in the people, or, as he says, “toward the general good.” “Stoop, Romans, stoop, and let us bathe our hands in Caesar’s blood Up to the elbows, and besmear our swords.” (Act 3, scene 1) Brutus becomes almost a leader of the assassination of Julius Caesar, yet this does not deter from his love for Rome and the people of it. Although, by killing Julius, he did betray the people whom wished for Julius to be crowned king. It is in that way that he may be considered a betrayer.

The true definition of patriotism is “love of country and willingness to sacrifice for it.” (Dictionary.com) Several things that Brutus says points out the love that he had for his country. Brutus was a patriot, and a close friend of Julius. He declares his love for him, but under the impression that the people of Rome would be better without him crowned as king, he takes the initiative to put aside his love for Julius and kill him. “If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other.” Brutus sacrificed his friendship with Julius Caesar for the good of Rome.

To conclude, Brutus was a patriot. He did betray the people of Rome, and his good friend Julius. However, these actions were done when he thought that he was being supportive of his country. So, it could be seen that Brutus was both a patriot and a betrayer of sorts.


  1. Highlight each part of your body paragraphs as follows:

    • Green = Claim

    • Yellow = Counterclaim

    • Red = Refuted counterclaim

  2. Based on your highlighting, what are the areas of your argument that need development?

Evidence supporting the claim.

  1. Incorporate two direct quotations from the text of Julius Caesar to better support your claim. Paste the examples below.

    • “Or else were this savage spectacle; our reasons are so full of good regard that were you, Anthony, the son of Caesar, you should be satisfied.” (Act 3, Scene 1)

    • “Romans, countrymen, and lovers! Hear me for my cause, and be silent that you may hear. Believe me for mine honor, and have respect to mine honor that you may believe.” (Act 3, Scene 2)

  2. Write sentences that introduce the relevancy of these quotations, and use a colon before each quotation. Paste these sentences below.

Brutus considers his actions to be deemed “full of good regard”. His intentions of serving the good of the people are demonstrated through this. “Or else were this savage spectacle; our reasons are so full of good regard that were you, Anthony, the son of Caesar, you should be satisfied.” (Act 3, Scene 1)

Another example of Brutus showing his good faith in the people is his speech. “Romans, countrymen, and lovers! Hear me for my cause, and be silent that you may hear. Believe me for mine honor, and have respect to mine honor that you may believe.” (Act 3, Scene 2) When pleading his case to the people of Rome, he brings up his honor. He believed that his actions were respectable because of the intentions behind it.



Organization

  1. Paste all of your revised body paragraphs and conclusion in the space below. Bold the transitions. Remember, transitions are used between examples and between examples and explanations.

“Et tu, Brute! Then fall, Caesar.” In Act 3, scene 1, Brutus acts against Julius in the betrayal of assassinating him. This action resulted in the accidental betrayal of the people whom wished for Julius Caesar to be crowned king. However, this does not take away from the fact that Brutus was a patriot for his people. “I would not, Cassius. Yet I love him well. But wherefore do you hold me here so long? What is it that you would impart to me? If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other,” (Act 1, scene 2) It is clear from Cassius’s intentions to turn Brutus against Julius that he only killed Julius Caesar out of support and faith in the people, or, as he says, “toward the general good.” “Stoop, Romans, stoop, and let us bathe our hands in Caesar’s blood Up to the elbows, and besmear our swords.” (Act 3, scene 1) Brutus becomes almost a leader of the assassination of Julius Caesar, yet this does not deter from his love for Rome and the people of it. Although, by killing Julius, he did betray the people whom wished for Julius to be crowned king. It is in that way that he may be considered a betrayer.

On the other hand, the definition of patriotism is “love of country and willingness to sacrifice for it.” (Dictionary.com) Several things that Brutus says points out the love that he had for his country. Brutus was a patriot, and a close friend of Julius. He declares his love for him, but under the impression that the people of Rome would be better without him crowned as king, he takes the initiative to put aside his love for Julius and kill him. “If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other.” Brutus sacrificed his friendship with Julius Caesar for the good of Rome. Brutus considers his actions to be deemed “full of good regard”. His intentions of serving the good of the people are demonstrated through this. “Or else were this savage spectacle; our reasons are so full of good regard that were you, Anthony, the son of Caesar, you should be satisfied.” (Act 3, Scene 1) Moreover, an example of Brutus showing his good faith in the people is his speech. “Romans, countrymen, and lovers! Hear me for my cause, and be silent that you may hear. Believe me for mine honor, and have respect to mine honor that you may believe.” (Act 3, Scene 2) When pleading his case to the people of Rome, he brings up his honor. He believed that his actions were respectable because of the intentions behind it.

To conclude, Brutus was a patriot. He did betray the people of Rome, and his good friend Julius. However, these actions were done when he thought that he was being supportive of his country. Therefore, it could be seen that Brutus was both a patriot and a betrayer of sorts.

  1. Identify what you have done to create a cohesive argument throughout this essay, especially in your conclusion.

I used transitions provided by the lessons and followed the outline format.

  1. Identify three areas where you can further improve this argument. Make these revisions and past the improved essay below.

Brutus from Shakespeare’s Julius Caesar is the subject of controversy in regards to patriotism and betrayal Brutus was a patriot because although Brutus’s actions may have suggested otherwise, he did everything in protection of the Roman people and in support of his country. All his actions were done out of pure love for his country. Brutus is a patriot because he supported his country, although, some may disagree because Brutus betrayed his close friend and the people (accidently) by killing Julius Caesar.

“Et tu, Brute! Then fall, Caesar.” In Act 3, scene 1, Brutus acts against Julius in the betrayal of assassinating him. This action resulted in the accidental betrayal of the people whom wished for Julius Caesar to be crowned king. However, this does not take away from the fact that Brutus was a patriot for his people. “I would not, Cassius. Yet I love him well. But wherefore do you hold me here so long? What is it that you would impart to me? If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other,” (Act 1, scene 2) It is clear from Cassius’s intentions to turn Brutus against Julius that he only killed Julius Caesar out of support and faith in the people, or, as he says, “toward the general good.” “Stoop, Romans, stoop, and let us bathe our hands in Caesar’s blood Up to the elbows, and besmear our swords.” (Act 3, scene 1) Brutus becomes almost a leader of the assassination of Julius Caesar, yet this does not deter from his love for Rome and the people of it. Although, by killing Julius, he did betray the people whom wished for Julius to be crowned king. It is in that way that he may be considered a betrayer.



On the other hand, the definition of patriotism is “love of country and willingness to sacrifice for it.” (Dictionary.com) Several things that Brutus says points out the love that he had for his country. Brutus was a patriot, and a close friend of Julius. He declares his love for him, but under the impression that the people of Rome would be better without him crowned as king, he takes the initiative to put aside his love for Julius and kill him. “If it be aught toward the general good, Set honor in one eye and death i' th' other.” Brutus sacrificed his friendship with Julius Caesar for the good of Rome. Brutus considers his actions to be deemed “full of good regard”. His intentions of serving the good of the people are demonstrated through this. “Or else were this savage spectacle; our reasons are so full of good regard that were you, Anthony, the son of Caesar, you should be satisfied.” (Act 3, Scene 1) Moreover, an example of Brutus showing his good faith in the people is his speech. “Romans, countrymen, and lovers! Hear me for my cause, and be silent that you may hear. Believe me for mine honor, and have respect to mine honor that you may believe.” (Act 3, Scene 2) When pleading his case to the people of Rome, he brings up his honor. He believed that his actions were respectable because of the intentions behind it.

To conclude, Brutus was a patriot. He did betray the people of Rome, and his good friend Julius. However, these actions were done when he thought that he was being supportive of his country. Therefore, it could be seen that Brutus was both a patriot and a betrayer of sorts.


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