*Write in past-tense only & never write in first-person (no “I”, “me”, “we”, “you”)!
*The introductory paragraph should ONLY include your thesis!
*All statements of comparison/contrast must be focused.
Ex: Rather than saying, “The Classical Chinese and Indian social hierarchies differed”, state the specific difference that exists between the social hierarchies. This is much better:
“The Classical Chinese and Indian social hierarchies differed in that merchants were given much greater respect in India than in China were they were ranked near the bottom of the Confucian hierarchy.”
*Each body paragraph should be spent analyzing a major topic that you pointed out in the thesis:
Ex: 1st body paragraph = Comparing and contrasting social structures in both China and India
*Cue words/phrases that express comparisons/contrasts should be used!
Ex: like, similar to, also, unlike, in the same way, likewise, compared to, in contrast, on the contrary, however, although, even though, but, still, nevertheless, conversely, at the same time, regardless, despite, while, on the one hand...on the other hand…
*The first sentence of each body paragraph should reflect the main idea of that paragraph. It should be one of your direct comparisons (which could be a statement of similarity or difference) that you first identified in the thesis.
Ex: Topic sentence of 1st body paragraph = “Classical China and India shared the similarity that their societies both used systems for forced labor.”
*In the body paragraphs, identify and discuss in depth only one similarity or difference at a time.
*After stating each direct comparison, you should try to give an analysis of that direct comparison. Explain why that specific similarity or difference exists. The analysis MUST be well-reasoned and insightful and NOT a superficial explanation.
Analysis of the direct comparison should look something like this…
Ex: “Neither Classical China or China depended on slaves for labor because in each civilization’s social hierarchies, there were groups of “free” people who had the duties that slaves would otherwise perform. Therefore, there was little need for slave ownership in these societies. In China, peasants were conscripted and in India, the lowest castes performed slave-like labor.”
*The conclusion paragraph should ONLY include your thesis! Your conclusion thesis should have any errors corrected that you may have made in your introductory paragraph (aka a “re-worked” thesis)!
*You do not need to define key concepts (ex. “patriarchy” or “centralization”)